Hi! My name is Loullipop and I am interested in being a coffee shop waitress. The reason for that is because I believe that I am a nice, considerate person which is one of the qualities for taking this job. I am also good at memorizing their orders. Third, my favorite drink is coffee and I know almost all of the coffee names such as Frappuccino, Espresso, etc... I hope you take this in consideration for my to take this job! Thank You!

It was a good start to an application but, I think you should make it longer and more organized. Maybe take a look at how other people write there applications, but don't copy. I hoped this helped.
~Angi