Once there was a kid name Quint that lived in Kentucky. One day, she was walking to school then a twister came! She ran and ran! She ran into the school, threw the hall, and into the girls bathroom, which had no windows. She was so scared. She put her hands behind her neck and closed her eyes, hoping that she'd survive this horrible twister! A random girl came into the bathroom and grabbed Quint. That lady ran to their basement that only teachers knew where it was. They went to a wall where there was no windows. There, they hoped to survive this twister, once again. "Who are you?!" Shouted Quint. "I'm Ms. Linda, Linda Secno, I'm a sub for today." wiSaid Linda. "Well," said Quint, looks like your job is not today!" "I know right." Said Linda. The twister was over. The whole school was ruined. Quints' family was lost, still alive, but was lost.
Quint lived with Linda for 20 years while their family was looking for Quint...

20 years later Quins' family finally found her! Linda was married to a guy named John Frank, and they all were a family. Quint was engaged to a guy named Nicholas Gillsburg. Quint was 19 now. And they all lived happily ever after. 2 months later Quint finally got married to Nicholas.

Wow great story but could of used more dialogue!! To make it exciting and maybe a little bit longer?? Well who should I blame it's not my story it's just my opinion.. Well great work I know it's hard making long post but this so far is good!! You could of made more dialogue on the living with for 20 years part to spruce it up a bit!! I know lot's about story writing in fifht grade I won first place in our school with a story!! But I don't like bragging...Keep up the good work my friend you're doing magnificent out there!!


~Furry On!

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