25th November 2013
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My first poem.

Made by Mohamed in The Lounge

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25th November 2013, 12:08 PM

Dark streams swishes,
with the orange fishes,
not all about courage,
but about some oranges.

Dead penguins lying around,
making circles round and round,
it wasn't because of health,
it was because of wealth.

Wealth goes bla-bling,
money goes cha-ching,
but never give up,
until the worse.

What did your friend say when you were about to die?
Did he say 'Lie in the night.'?
But what did your foe say when you were about to have health?
Did he say 'Shut up, I got wealth.'?

But, what did YOU say when you were about to have wealth?
Did you say, 'Forget the health.'?
What did YOUR BFF say to when you were having wealth?
Did he say 'Please, spend your wealth and instead, have health.'.


Never distrust a friend, never be greedy, please for the need.
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25th November 2013, 12:15 PM

I love it! But why do dead penguins spin round and round?
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25th November 2013, 12:17 PM

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I love it! But why do dead penguins spin round and round?
Their corpses are still alive, but their mind is unstable and disconnected from their cells. Maybe they just fell. Not sure why they spin round. Guess my dumbness is still around.
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25th November 2013, 12:19 PM

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I love it! But why do dead penguins spin round and round?
Their corpses are still alive, but their mind is unstable and disconnected from their cells. Maybe they just fell. Not sure why they spin round. Guess my dumbness is still around.

You are poem pro! Even your last two sentences rhymed!
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25th November 2013, 12:23 PM

Isn't it three, can't you see? For the world is a misunderstanding. But maybe some of you ARE an understanding.
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25th November 2013, 12:26 PM

Sorry, I don't count plural and singular rhymes in one rhyme. I prefer them with their own rhyming pairs. Great rhyming, though!
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