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8th January 2014, 04:19 PM
pum param pum pum param pum pum param pum param param wait wait wait for me all day whenever i feel ok i feel my legs but i dont wanna bet i feel like i just left (guitar)if its a long story im in a hurry im just really really bored. were both so happy and everyones clappy i guess were really in love! love your hug love your hug i guess u better love hugs!





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Seen 11th August 2015
8th January 2014, 04:23 PM
sorry if u cant see with that color heres it written perfectly pum param pum pum param pum pum param pum param param wait wait wait for me all day whenever i feel ok i feel my legs but i dont wanna bet i feel like i just left (guitar)if its a long story im in a hurry im just really really bored. were both so happy and everyones clappy i guess were really in love! love your hug love your hug i guess u better love hugs!





8th January 2014, 04:26 PM
Hello nice song but just some future tips :
1. I think you should make your songs longer
2. make it flow and sorta like with a toon
3. make it make sense
i enjoyed your song it made me laugh a little
sincerely,
Khalfan
1. I think you should make your songs longer
2. make it flow and sorta like with a toon
3. make it make sense
i enjoyed your song it made me laugh a little
sincerely,
Khalfan




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8th January 2014, 04:34 PM
Quote:
Hello nice song but just some future tips :
1. I think you should make your songs longer
2. make it flow and sorta like with a toon
3. make it make sense
i enjoyed your song it made me laugh a little
sincerely,
Khalfan
1. I think you should make your songs longer
2. make it flow and sorta like with a toon
3. make it make sense
i enjoyed your song it made me laugh a little
sincerely,
Khalfan
9th January 2014, 04:52 PM
well sorry i didnt mean to be mean mr. bossy!



